Hmm...

I see what you were going for but everything is just clipping and distorting, it just sounds like a mess.

I think this would be great if you put more effort into the mix and maybe put less focus on loudness. Your extra melody and beat sounds great, the intro and breakdowns are also pretty good but I can't really go into detail because the mix is seriously that bad.

Hope you sort this out, it has potential.

Quality, not loudness.

I'm not sure you're aware of how loud this song actually is. Much louder than it should be really, feel free to turn it down and get rid of that clipping.

Anyway, a decent track but the clipping and loudness make it too crowded in parts where it shouldn't be. I like the piano score a lot and I love how much variation there is overall. The beat is a bit weak though, and it sounds way too robotic, especially the hats. I think the percussion should vary between each bit, like use instruments for different sections because that snare doesn't work well in some parts, for example in the piano breakdown.

I could tell this was produced in FL after I recognised a couple of effects and synths but you used all the instruments pretty well so I don't think it matter for this track.

The mix, like I said, is pretty poor with all the clipping. I also think a lot of the instruments need EQ'ing so they don't feel like they're fighting for the same space in the track.

In a nutshell, great ideas and arrangement. However, a bad mix. But I guess that's something you pick up over time.